Choose a "Boring" Paragraph from the sheet that was handed out in class today.
Rewrite it on the sheet making it more exciting just like we have been doing in class - be sure to use a fun beginning, lots of adjectives, descriptive verbs and adjectives, similes, sound effects.
Example "Boring" Paragraph:
We got a puppy. She is cute. We named her Riley. She is white and black. She likes to play. She sleeps on my bed. We take her for walks. I love my dog, Riley.
Example "Better" Paragraph (this was done as a whole class in school today):
Whoo hoo! I'm so excited that I am hopping around my room like a Mexican jumping bean! This is the day I have been waiting for my whole life! We got an adorable, fluffy, little puppy. We thought all day about what to name her... finally I yelled out, "Riley!!!" "Woof Woof," Riley called out when she heard it. What a perfect name! She is white like a cotton ball and has lots of black spots, and big floppy black ears. So adorable! She plays by bouncing all over the house and tripping clumsily over her ginormous paws. During the day, we take her for long walks around our awesome neighborhood so she can get her exercise and at night, she and I curl up together on my comfy bed and fall fast asleep. I never thought I would be able to get a dog and I love her so much sometimes I feel like my heart might burst! What an awesome feeling!
Directions:
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Type your final draft of your new paragraph in the box
Sign your name in the box underneath the paragraph
Click that you're not a robot
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